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Pfft.
This is a time
of renewal, rebirth?
Please.

Here, we all sneeze more.
It rains.

Dumb slutty kids
underdress for prom.

There, the ice is still frozen.

But.
I saw a female cardinal
in its dull brown beauty
stand out against the brightness
of the day.
It endures.

Not the rejection,
but the recognition of winter.
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For #Soul-Poets' Spring prompt.

Hope you guys will read my other poetry. I'm getting quite a collection started.
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~HazySunray May 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love the mild cynicism and the added, noncommittal words that just seem to aggrandize the emotional meaning of the poem.
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Mood: Joy *akarra May 27, 2012  Student Writer
Love your comment! Yeah, there's definitely a movement to objectivity of some sort here, perhaps.

Our speaker knows something. Just wish I knew what it is.
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~HazySunray May 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hahahaha! I can completely relate to that. :D
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~Landminds May 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like the spite and humor in this. Longer winters are fun.
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Mood: Love *akarra May 27, 2012  Student Writer
They are! I agree entirely with our angrier speaker. I definitely think he's on to something with the cardinal. Prom, he just might be a bit spiteful...
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Enjoyable. A little debunking is often for the common good!
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Mood: Wow! *akarra May 27, 2012  Student Writer
Agreed. Spring is too easy a trope.
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~TheGlassIris Apr 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I can see Romanticism rolling in its grave. And, like an elephant shot for ivory, it becomes

Tragically beautiful. (snort)
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Mood: Love *akarra May 27, 2012  Student Writer
You know, the haiku poets I've been reading have their own cynicism about "Spring is so awesome look at all the love blah blah." Basho especially seems to see it as more natural, therefore more chaotic.
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~TheGlassIris May 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I couldn't read anything other than the translated versions myself, as I'm not fluent in Japanese. From what I understand of Japanese literature, spring has all the normal connotations of the rest of the world but there is a whole ideology about the fleeting passions and ephemeral beauty of the season. The cherry blossom in particular has a very paradoxical connotation behind it. At once, it represents beauty and life, but simultaneously, decay and disappointment in its own short season of flowering.

Personally, I think that its a nice sentiment, but also one that's a little bland.

These days, the thing I'm into is poetry by American women. Marge Piercy's "More than Enough", Alice Walker's "How Poems Are Made: A Discredited View", and Diane Wakowski's "Dancing on the Grave of a Son of a Bitch".

I wrote this, thinking about what they had to say: "Ballad of the American Waitress"

This, thinking about how overdramatic all the other people make them out to be: "House of Fake Sorrows"

And finally this, according to how I think: "Thousand-Star"

Tell me about what you think of them, yeah?
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