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That loud crap blares
from speakers large and small.
Can't understand the words -
just dull thuds, synthetic sounds,
style of dress I'd almost laugh at.

Almost. "Deviant," then in my mind, "thugs;"
no fun being scared of everyone younger.
I remember how my wife's family
talked about me before she was my wife.
Nat King Cole and Sinatra played all too clear.
Too much vinegar on the salad.

One dinner I stared at a candle
flickering on the table.
The room had more than enough light.
In discrete moments the flame struggled.
My wife remembers the slight smirk I wore,
bright in its own way.
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Thought I'd see what I could do with the contest prompt: this is definitely not a submission (I'm judging, after all).

I've got a bunch of new watchers. Please do check out this interview with me; facebook likes for my work are more than appreciated.
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:iconserelenntidude:
I like the synthesized and classic music, but I get the loudness thing, the rudeness.
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~Merikuu May 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha, I like this alot^^ I love the personal touch in it, that makes it interesting.
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:icontheomelette:
Very intriguing. I don't understand it really, but is poetry ever meant to be understood? You have a very distinct voice here and the ending really gives the poem a spark. Nice work.
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Featured on our facebook page [link]
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Mood: Love *SanityFallen Apr 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Haha I love this. Very powerful and I love the playful but sharp energy to it
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:iconlewanut:
Doesn't this poem violate the thirty-word limit? ;)
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Mood: Joy *akarra Apr 26, 2012  Student Writer
Very much so. If I were doing this for the contest, I would still write the long version, then cut down, cut down, cut down...
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Mood: Love ~BluMiu Apr 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love how you tied in personal experiences, the music, and created an atmosphere; Definitely felt a setting coming to mind for me~
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Mood: Joy *akarra Apr 26, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks! I definitely tried to set a scene instead of dealing with more/less abstract images.
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~BluMiu Apr 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Definitely~ I tend to linger on abstract, so it was great to read a poem like this executed so well! ^^
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