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Frown of frustration from him;
she savaged the self crafted.
A drop of sweat almost hit the ground,
but the feathery arm was quite a surprise.
Perched, it was no struggle to take off,
and I met you while making loops in the air.

Highly placed,
transfixed by the refinement of brick, wood.
Then, gliding between buildings,
the power of the draft,
the grandeur of building.
Our day ended atop a telephone pole,
seeing the bright orange and rosy pink fade away.

We don't have a song.
All we have is a natural strength
from an unnatural happening.
You almost left your burden in tears
before you were on that skyscraper,
searching.
:iconakarra:
Thinking about someone. It's a pipe dream at the moment. Let's see if she responds.

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~NachoPenguin Feb 3, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Amazing I love it :3:!!!
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~Sigma-Echo-Seven Sep 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Every line of the last stanza is flawless.
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Mood: Joy ~Hazyl Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nice imagery!
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~SpadeDiamondHeart Aug 6, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This is amazing and I love the amount of vibrancy in you're work!
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Mood: Love =CrematedMan Aug 5, 2012  Student Writer
I love the imagery and the last stanza is fantastic.

Thank-you for the :+fav: and :+devwatch:.
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Mood: Affection *lantern-rose Jul 12, 2012  Professional Writer
I really enjoyed this, I like how I feel like I am reading through the eyes of a bird spending the day courting another bird in a city. Lovely poem!~
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Mood: Love ~Emo-Girl-Loves-You Jul 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I have no idea how to describe how I see this other than wonderfully done.
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~CoatiMonday Jun 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Brilliant imagery!
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:iconsioraine:
"We don't have a song.
All we have is a natural strength
from an unnatural happening."

:heart:
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:iconserelenntidude:
I hope she does (did?). Looks like there's something there.
This is great the way it flows, the words you chose, and the story it tells, it's just great.
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